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A dead girl came to my room last night
Dressed in white and cold as ice
    I gave her a smile although I was terribly scared
    I gave her a hug although we'd never met
    I gave her a kiss although we'd never loved
    I gave her time although I'd little to spare
    I gave her pennies for her eyes although I was poor
    I gave her a flower although I had no garden
Dressed in white and cold as ice
A dead girl came to my room last night
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A train-ride sent this banging through my head. Now it's out here instead, and I think that's better.

EDIT: Pleased though I am to have all these favs, I can't help but wonder, where the heck are they coming from? I'm not a bad writer, but I'm not THAT good. Did someone link people here?
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Mood: Love ~LarksUncaged Dec 24, 2011  Professional Photographer
This is fantastic. <3
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~crazy-stalker-chick Dec 2, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i love this :D
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~ArNascFola Oct 4, 2011   Writer
Very interesting. Paints a mental picture.
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~KotomiTin71 Oct 1, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this. :D If I could draw, I'd draw what the dead girl looks like in my mind, but it wouldn't look good on the computer. :\ I'd have to draw it on paper, but I can't put it online after that. :\ So I guess you might never know what I think of when I read this. :P Sorry. But it's very good. :D
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This really is beautiful.

Trust me, even if you feel you're getting faves you don't deserve, you poem is getting all the faves it deserves ^^
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~LeeroySMX357 Sep 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It's not that you're not that good of a writer. This is just a really good piece. Short, but sweet. That's why all of us on dA fav'd it.
And let me emphasize that by saying that I just love it. It's simple, but it made me feel something. That, or heartburn just has great timing. :) Congrats again.
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~DevinBlood Sep 29, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's so sweet... v_v
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This is really pretty, in a sad way of course...
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~kemonekko123 Sep 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This is awesome...Like Seriously
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~purpleumpa10 Sep 29, 2011  Student General Artist
It's just a good piece. People noticed it, so you're getting crazy amounts of faves. It's something very different. I like it myself.
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